I wrote this story nearly 4 years ago. It's loosely based on the relationship one of my frieds was in at the time, it is also the first true short story I had ever written. I've thought of going back and expanding the story to develop it more. I would like to know your thoughts on what you would like to see more of in the story if I choose to pursue extending it. Thank you for leaving your opinion about my story, it means the world.

the creeps!*** Nadine

Mae,

I liked your story very much. I would have liked if you took the time to develop the characters a little more. Romeo was very interesting.

I look forward to reading more of your work.

Mark

I wanted the reader to be able to manifest the character in their own way, that's one reason I decided not to name the characters. The story was never intended to be about the 'Romeo' character, it was about the girl who was finally able to break away from the illusion of true love.

Good descriptions and use of adjectives. I wanted to know more about Romeo. What went wrong? It would make the story more engaging.

Now this story, it was awesome. Just, great all around. Thank you for posting it. I needed a good murder. LOL. You are an awesome writer.
:P

Awesome. Truly. Very descriptive, and gruesome as well.

So raw and emotional. Very good read. Thank you.

It was written well enough to actually feel the author's pain and torment. Talk about an author identifying with their character, she had this!

Shelly Stone

Beware the wrath of a woman scorned huh?