You have put a lot of effort into this story, and for that I commend you. It is not easy to write historical novels without a great deal of research. This needs to be highly edited and refined before it can be regarded as a true "historical" piece of work. For example, apart from the grammatical errors sprinkled throughout, some words were incorrectly used, i.e., 'studying one "profusely"' is not the correct use of the word.... mehr anzeigen
You have put a lot of effort into this story, and for that I commend you. It is not easy to write historical novels without a great deal of research. This needs to be highly edited and refined before it can be regarded as a true "historical" piece of work. For example, apart from the grammatical errors sprinkled throughout, some words were incorrectly used, i.e., 'studying one "profusely"' is not the correct use of the word. There is no such word as "Englander" and a person living in those times would not use the words "wow" or "sure". An "abode" is a house, not a garden. I think you can see what I mean by getting someone else to edit and proof your work.
I like the fact that you attempted this...but I do feel it needs more work. A good effort indeed.
