You know I feel a connection to this story because I have always wondered about the song "The Last Time I Saw Paris". Truly sad but yet in the same sense one that you feel compelled to read.

I will take your advice and change that asap.
I appreciate you stopping by and commenting.

Avery sad story but well done none the less. What you might want to do is make sure that the few lines of dialogue you have should be in a paragraph of its own no matter how brief the dialogue is. It would improve readability. Anything that is not dialogue should either stay with the paragraph before or the paragraph after the dialogue.

Thank you for participating in our short
story writing contest "Family Stories".

The Librarian