I was privileged to have read it yesterday. Not much in the way of improvement I could suggest then...or now:)
You have the "fantasy touch" nailed.
I agree with Sereni, the only issue I have is that it's too short! But then, the Flash dictates length. Couldn't have been better at twice the word count:)
May I suggest that after the contest you expand it?

Very well written, only one thing I would change. You said on the last page, "too many young ones have ended their lives due to countless of reasons."

I think you could leave out the of

Amazing, as usual! This could even work as a prologue to a much longer tale - it's so full of mystery, hope, light, fantasy, magic and beauty! And as always, your cover art is perfect! Yup, I'll be back to vote.

Thanks David and Sereni (Pam).
I squeezed the maximum I was allowed...1000 words.

Erinmore and The Lost Children By Lazarus

The cover you designed was lovely, and I knew once I had turned the page that I would be entering the magical land of Erinmore.
I love where you referred to the stars as pixies. I thought Whisper was a great name for the bat that Candice heard while she dreamed.I could see her flying on her back through the night not knowing what was ahead of her.She was still young and showed strong faith to take that first step, and listen to Whisper.
I can see this being read by young and old. I plan to share it with my nine year-old grand-daughter.
This was a lovely way to start off my day.

The delivery was flawless.
I give your story five stars, and will be back to vote. The only complaint I have is that it was to short.

Upon hitting the promotion page, was shocked to see the title. My sister's name is Erin Moore. Thought, wow, that is kinda weird. Then read the story and being a lost child herself, thought, holy cow!

A great, great read that all will enjoy!

Very nicely done, Laz. You Rock!