Laz, you know how much I love mystery thrillers, with a touch of romance. This extremely interesting story is definitely right up my alley. I can't sing your praises adequately enough for this gem. Please, write more as soon as you are able to. I love it and it held me glued, page after page. I am also a big fan of the Victorian era and homes. Like someone else mentioned, this book reads like an older Gothic horror story. My favorite of yours so far. Your best work yet, in my opinion. Keep up the incredible work with this!

Thanks Creator99...but wait til it's finished, you'll love it even more.
Laz

I love this book!!!!

I LOVED THE BOOK, I REALLY ENJOYED IT BUT IT WAS SAD.

All of the books i read of laz's is great. He is a great writer. I wish i could write like him and just sit down and let it flow.

Thanks for your input and vote. You are a dear.

I'd be more than concerned about the past that is haunting me, I'd be terrified and determined! Make sure she is determined! :) I need to enter this contest, perhaps. Votes are free, I shouldn't be so frugal!

Thanks Elsha,
I know, it's hard to be a man when it comes to writing from a woman's viewpoint. I try. My wife knows more about car models than I do.
I'll check on the repetition, and make some changes. You must remember that this is only about a fifth of the story. There's much more to come.
Yes, Alexandra is curious, also scared, who wouldn't be. Yet, she is concerned enough to do some investigating.
I do appreciate what you wrote, and will try to tweek the story a little.
Thanks again,
Laz

it's never to late to make changes! you can edit your books.

There are a few details that stand out to me that scream 'written by a man'. The car brand, the heating methods repeated over and over, the comics, the admiring her figure.
Okay, so women do admire themselves, and they can know types of cars, but added with the other details, it's just too MALE. :P
Please go back and watch for repetition! It's my pet peeve, I admit, but repeating words or phrases or scene details makes me feel like I, as the reader, am being told I am stupid. Edit out those repetitions! The recaps about the kids are fine, not those, I mean from one sentence to the next.
You really stepped up the thrill at the end! But I felt it took too long to get there. I think you need to work on her justifying the sounds and ignoring the sightings, growing curious instead of afraid, a little bit more. She doesn't quite have the sensitivities of a woman in these parts.
There's something about the pacing that is not quite right.
I'm not a fan of scaring myself, but you could make the beginning more thrilling to better hook those that are. The dog part is good, but not intense. Ghost kids and old houses are a little cliche, so to make it unique, you have to capture our attention with something new.
Keep at it! These bare bones are strong! Just a few tweaks and you can knock our socks off!