Very good vocabulary and sentence stucture kept me in tune to this creepy story. Also the cover looks great!

You know I love your stories, Laz, as they are a little different. Having helped you edit, I really am "into" what is happening and look forward to finding out what will be revealed later. All the best, my friend, and of course you have my vote. Val

Thanks Mitchell

wow another wonderful story cant wait to read the rest of your work

I loved your book, Laz, it was awsome. The whole ghost story really captivates you and keeps you wanting to read more. You have more than earned my vote. Please keep posting more!

Nice story; I think it's a winner!

Very well expressed thoughts and feelings of the characters and the action of the book is one of the best .Thank you for sharing...Mari

you are quite deep in the subject,well written.

Interesting observations Cleveland. You suspect Alexandra. So my story is working, that's good. Sure things don't match up right now, That's why it's a mystery, but it's just the beginning. A lot more is ahead...a lot more. So keep guessing.
Thanks....Laz

I've read this story a fe times and knew I was missing something.
The story line is fine and the POV comes across except for areas where reactions don't match up to time of day and what was the 'magnet.' I also have a hunch that Alexandra is up to know good and has an agenda about the house. Already in a few chapters it is the attic and later on it will be the basement.It is fine to have much action but equally fine to have some 'lows' in order to catch up on the back story. It is the flow from one to another that will make the story.
Not too happy with the interaction between the old woman and the housekeeper.Especially the old woman and then again Alexandra who turns up at a house at night. Somebody isn't telling us everything.But keep on writing and good luck in the contest.
Best
Cleveland