Thanks...I think I will but I must decide in what direction I will go. I want it to be romantic, but not x-rated. So...that is the challenge.Maybe I will have two versions....i just don't know yet.

It is really good I hope you write more of it would really like to find out what happens between these to people and what would affect them being with each other please write more.

Thanks Val...you do know well that the tenses are my biggest problem...lol

Val said....yes, lets have the rest of this romance or tragedy as your spirit leads..P

A nice start...you set the mood very well. I look forward to seeing the rest of it. Just go back, if you will, and correct your tenses. In some sentences you have past and present concurrently (I would eliminate ALL present tenses). Change the word "lover" to "lovers." Let me know when you have written more. . . .

To tell the truth...I don't know yet myself...lol

You do have a way with words! I can totally fell the mood with the few words you wrote. Not really sure where the story might go, though...
Good job!
Liz