What a wonderfully kind thing to say, Laz! I had such a good time writing this story. I could practically hear my father's voice in my ear as I wrote it as he had told me tales about the day he decided to join the Army...it was shortly after Pearl Harbor because the ramifications of that attack rippled all the way to the east coast!
Avery
I loved the ending. The dialog brought back memories for me. I hadn't thought about a friend named Sergeant Barnett for many years until I read your story.
Sergeant Barnett and I where stationed at Camp Lejuene North Carolina after returning from Vietnam. He invited to spend a weekend on the family farm just outside of Morehead City.
The dialog in your story reminded strongly of his family, they talked the same way. As I read... mehr anzeigen
Avery, I love your out of the box thinking! Never stop! It broke my heart when mom read that last letter from Peter. You can imagine the chaos in that house after reading that letter. I am proud of you for being brave enough to enter a contest. I'm not there yet! Good job.
Your story has successfully brought out the real scary moments in life when people face real dangers of life.
You have way to go!!!
All the best!
No, not a bit. Using the theme, you traveled with it outside the box. You consistently write literate stories, and this gem is no exception.
How unique, Avery!
A truly scary story.
I think it should have done very well in the contest.
I hoped Peter was one of the survivors.
This one should have been among the winners.