It's really hard to read.
And your opening is a bit OTT. I wouldn't use expletives on the opening line.
Let me know if you change the colour and I'll come back and read it.
Wendy
its really good i hope you write more im looking forward to it :))))
plz write more.ad if u do plz tell me when
update soooooooooon its soooooo gooooodddd
Funny and witty with a hilarious character with a really bad temper! Throughout the book there are many laughs and a LOT of drama. It flips from Alanna's and Diego's point of view and this makes the book interesting and you get a good insight. It's a strong start to what looks like will be a great book :) I really love it, keep writing :)
