it was a really interesting story:) i had fun reading it :) very good. you get my vote :) and i was wondering if you would like to read my story suffer :) it's in my profile and please give me feed back and your honesty :) thank you :)

Got your story read today and it sounds great. The only real problem I had was with my eyes skipping a line because paragraphs aren't indented. Maybe my eyes are just getting old, but I have a terrible time when the page looks like all text, no extra spaces or indenting for paragraphs so that they are easily seen. Other than that I enjoyed it. One tiny correction.

All (that) saw it-- should probably be--All (who) saw it. Who is generally used for people, that for animals or things. Gave you a vote and best of luck to you in the contest.
Denna

Sent you a vote Joe

You do an awesome job of fleshing out your characters. I really liked Lily, I thought you did the best on her. You brought her life into focus with great clarity.

I see the weaving beginning of a great story with these characters. It will be interesting to see if they can make a whole story with the puzzle pieces of their personalities. Good luck! Robynn

Great story, can't wait to read the rest!

Any American writer who admits to the poor gets my vote.

Got my vote! :)

Got my vote! :)

I'm hooked please finish it sson as i want to know what happens to them all x

I love it! It is amazing! Since this is my first reading by Joe, I've just got stunned. I've heard his others are great so I'm looking forward to reading them. I only had to read a couple of sentences before I could confirm that the beginning will be great. My vote is in. Good luck!