- you have a very nice mix of rhythm and rhyme. your choice of words and the way they're presented with your unique cadence gives an effect that can be felt almost kinesthetically, ie: it really gets into you.
- a rambling left hook with a colourful right claw!

I liked your writing style and imagery. My vote for you. Thankyou!

Jamie, your poetry favorably surprised me with moments of great lyrical originality that transported me to the scene, and you have a connection to your experience that can't be learned or faked, something I see as a poetic soul basically. It will be great to see how its further journeys into the (sometimes harsh) world ahead result in verse. I voted for you because your great moments stood out for me as a reader.

Ah, thank you! I'm glad I probed.

Didn't mean to be so flippant, guess that's what happens when I comment first thing in the morning. Your poetry escapes the trap that 90% of amateur poetry I read does, in that it (sometimes) it takes on new subject matter. Sometimes it works well, and your imagery/formatting is as such that you really make it apparent for the reader when you're doing something a little bit unique. That works in your favor (the three lines repeating, etc) for now, but once people appreciate you as a talented poet you may need to be a bit more subtle.

Some of these are great - the drug-induced honey-sweet day with amphetamines and opiate imagery is fine, although "honey sweet" "dew" and "dripping" are probably some of the most common descriptors for a warm morning in poetry.

Overall I think you're exceptionally talented, and given your age you will be capable of great things. I went ahead and voted for this in the contest.

You are very good, thanks for the chance to read this. Hope you enjoy my book as well.

Great Images and flow of words, as you catch the reader from the beginning to the ending.
My favorites are Fall, Goodnight stars,The pudding and Immaterial: 5am pt2: prose (especialy about the dancing sun in your dreams)

Wael

I agree with Dennis, Anne, and the rest of the comments that were made. I especially liked "A Memory", "Fall", and "The Pudding". Great Work!

Benita

Though a first anthology, this book is filled with imagery of a seasoned poet. I particularly love the poem, "Fall". Keep on writing. You have alot to say.

You are already a very accomplished poet, in my opinion.
I started to jot down my favorites, but honestly...I found something special in each. Here is a short list, starting with the one that I think is totally right-on and could be published anywhere right this second:
"FALL"!! "Siam Husk" is masterful as well. I also loved "Who" and "Little Murder Ditty" (you seem to use the butterfly image beautifully in this , as well as "Fall".
You are very blessed with this ability of yours. Truly impressive work!

Robin