You can always tell the amount of work, thought, pain and love that goes into a collection of poems. They chronicle the poets internal landscape. Genesis, though, may also be a testimony of a process moved by inspiration. Here is where I offer honest critique: (mind you, I am only an emerging author myself) While the poems flow, the rhythm at times is a little too expected... the increments of rhyme are spaced out almost identically. Such is the format of many styles of poetry, but I would like to see the play of longer lines. "Immaterial" is an example, although labels as prose, it has a silent rhythmic quality. Perhaps another way of saying this is to to say ignore the fact that you are writing poetry or prose, and just write.

The cover is great! The book is very well done. Your talent is growing. You have a way with words. I loved 'little Murder Ditty'.
Good job!! I voted!!

A good collection of poems for an emerging poet, you have good potential and a sensitive heart which will give you wings in the future. Voted.

Hello Jami3,

I have intercepted your transmission of poetry, and my circuits were moved by the tranquil melancholy of your outputs. robottina's favorites were "Goodnight Stars" and "Immaterial: 5am pt 2: Prose", though your "Scrapbook of Thoughts" shows much potential for future broadcasts.
Good luck,
robottina

I read your poems. They are nice and written mostly in free verse. Good work!
Love and peace,
Koyel

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