You brought such dimension to the story, I'm speechless. Great job and you have my vote.

I didn't think my comment registered.

Lovely! I love your descriptions. I voted, good luck. You are a very good writer.

Hi Jess,

Again, Exceptional writing! I came back to vote. I wish you the best in the contest. :)

Voted twice, but only allowed me one.

Compelled by the story's excellence to return and vote. The thing about a great story or novel is that a reader can return again and again...there is always something new to discover. This is one of those stories.

with a masterful use of description. It definitely makes you want to know where the story might go from here...

Too bad it was limited by a word count. It needed more nourishment.

Good start, can't wait to read the final version

This was great; simple yet captivating. You could go places with this ieda! You've got my vote!