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Good luck Jess!
One of the best stories in this contest. Vivid in description, and flawless in form or delivery. T'was a pleasure to 'see'.
The images; the methods and exceptionally descriptive words you chose to build this phenomenal short are so, so impressive. Not many have the tools to do what you've done. It reads so effortlessly, and having chosen 1st person was without a doubt brilliant!
I take my hat off to you. This is the finest story in the Flash category I've ever read...it has everything.
What a fabulous conclusion! ! !
As always I enjoyed reading your piece. You are a very talented writer and this story proves you can easily create a very intimate atmosphere with the reader.
Great job, sweety!
Beautifully descriptive with masterful use of words - and an obvious imagination! Nothing wrong with your ideas, word usage or poetic phrasing.
Your tenses are all over the place, which makes this difficult to read. Keep it all in the PRESENT TENSE. Go back - and everything you have written in the past tense which does not sound correct, change to present. It sounds awkward and spoils what could be a terrific entry in this... mehr anzeigen
Excellent piece Jess. Your vivid descriptions and writing style make this a pleasure to read. I want to know more!
Jess,
Wow. I love this captivating masterpiece. You are a very talented writer. As RbG mentioned you should definitely consider making this into a novel. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Exceptional writing!
Oh my goodness. You've just made me giddy! You're writing is superb. I'd give it a five-star rating.
This story is amazing. I don't know what else to say. It was as if I were watching a movie as the scene unfolded from various shots on the screen.
You have talent. Wow. I'm speechless.
You should make this into a novel! Add onto it, please :)
Keep writing!
---RbG