Ok so I finally got around to reading your added parts, (Sorry for the wait) and I thought they were awesome! I loved the little part with the napkin and how he criticized her for litering! Keep on writing!
Go ahead, lay it on me. I'm strong. If this is what I need to make it better, then so be it.
Alright, would you like the nice version or the critical version?
I've just finished this short book and I think that a lot of work needs to be done to it. I'm not trying to be mean, I just want to help.
If you want to know my reasons, then respond to this. If not, then I will keep my words to myself, ok?
Fight scene was done very well, good pace, just enough explanation! Keep on writing....Robynn
Heh thanks, Chelsea! But actually I had writer's block for about 2 months before I was able to write the next chapter.
Thanks, Devon! I've actually already written more, but I'm gonna upload by the chapter.
It's amazing!!! I love the new additions to the book! keep writing!
I just updated the book, it's got 16 more pages. Feel free to comment and advise.