I want the whole story its interesting

Seems interesting enough.....Imma read it and post my thoughts when I finish it.

I PLAYED THE GAME BLOODY MARRY. STUPIDEDIATIC .THE STORY WAS REALLY NICE

Very Thriller!!!

amaziing...

Never knew you were so freaking talentedly awesome....

It was good, I think that's all I have to say. It was really good.

omg i love this book

omg i love this book

Overall I liked it, though it does need to be polished. A few things i remember is on the first page you say my breaths came out fast and uneven. My suggestion is you change it to something like this: My breathing became fast and uneven. Also on the first page you say: I nearly tripped over a fallen branch. I think this adds more to how she it came to be that she trips: Fear had taken a firm grip on me, in my state of anxiety I even stumbled over a branch. Lastly on page 15 you say But my eyes scanned the wall and i screamed, yet again. It isnt bad but i dont think it flows nicely. maybe this?: Then my eyes scanned the wall, what i noticed forced a scream out of me. This isnt all of the mistakes, so i hope this inspires you to go through and polish it. ALSO these are all mostly suggestions and i did like your story as a whole.