This was well done, but strangely confusing. I didn't get the ending. I mean, I'm assuming he'd some type of Sherlock Holmes, but the last sentence really threw me for a loop. Is he good or bad? Did he murder the woman or find her? And are you going to say what happened?

I am young, so I might just not be able to get it, but I still would like to be able to understand.

And there's only one sentence issue that I'd like to point out to you: the second sentence of the entire story confused me. What is "light rain"? I might just be simple minded, but for a moment I thought it was raining some type of light. I don't know, but that's the only sentence that looks like it could be improved.

Other than that, it was well written. But I just keep wondering, what happened?

Awesome job!
Keep writing!

---RbG

Another clever piece of writing! I enjoyed how you were able to morph the character from apparently good guy, to bad guy, in less than two pages. Mental note to read more of your work.

Taut, tight and gripping. An excellent story.

This is the quintessential "flash fiction" entry. It is very short, yet contains an entire story with a shocking end.

If this does not become a front runner, I shall eat my (non-existent) hat!