I know the pain to wait behind a door for your child to undergo an operation. I think it's written very good. You've captured the woman's emotions well.

I really liked the descriptions and wanted to see the story continue. You now have the readers interest so keep going I would say.

It seems to me you should make it longer because more people get more involved in more longer stories then short ones. But so far its pretty good

I LOVE IT MAY YOU READ MINE AND TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK