Amazing storyline, brilliant description and awesome book.
this is perfect i love the way you have described everything so detailed and understandable. however there are parts where you have a few typos (everyone makes mistakes, i'm terrible in typing) but they don't make it hard to understand the story or what your saying.
i think you need a good blurb to go with such an awesome book i can't get over the fact it is so brilliant i hope to read more and keep up the great work.
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MORE!! i love it..keep writing

I LOVE IT! :D But you have a ton of run-on sentences and it's kind of hard to tell what belongs to what O_O Now don't listen to my advice too much, I'm very bad when it comes down to grammar but that's all I see to be wrong with your story. the run-on sentences..OTHERWISE, Me Likey (;