I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for your support.

nice man, i think u can be a good writer soon! dont give up! vote 4 u

thou you have some harsh words.. but i guess you have express yourself with a talented imagination... lol if it is an imagination who knows maybe it was happen long time ago

Very good read man. I liked it a lot. I think everyone can relate to it at some point in time in there life.

Very well done. If you write anymore, let me know.

Thanks for your feedback. Please let me know what you thought even if you think I won't like it. I want to know what you guys think. PLEASE read it all if you want to comment though.
Thanks
Herschel(Jon)

I didn't know what to think with the title but, I think it was really good, you got my vote. Keep up the great work.
Looking forward for more.
Amber

And this guy Alron... whats your deal? I mean, I understand if you feel a certain way about "dirty Language" or whatever your trying to tell yourself.. but i mean, why even take the time to leave a comment besides to criticize Jon for his efforts? You didn't help anyone, not even yourself... these comments are for opinions and feedback, whether there is foul language or not is not important. You have absolutely no insight on this book whatsoever because you didnt finish it, so you should have just kept your ridiculous opinion to yourself. As a whole jon, your book was incredible.. don't listen to him. Atleast 80 percent of authors use curse words in their writings because it's real life. Go back to your kids stories.

Awesome ending man. Needs some work on the scene transitions but overall, very powerful. You did good bro. I hope you win.
:)
j.sin

I feel bad for you alron, you're missing out on so much. I guess you have different opinions. Wish you would've finished it at least.

Sorry never got past 1st paragraph, I dont use foul language and cant read it either.