This is what I saw.

When I began reading, the thought hit me..."The font! It's tough reading." But okay, I continued on. I saw a few grammaticals and some punctuation oopses; some cliches. 5 points on a scale of 1 to 10 so far.
I read the last page, and then everything hit me "like a ton of bricks", all at once.
Excellence in every respect. You, sir, can write. You know the rules and how and when to break them. It's perfectly obvious on reading the last page what you were up to, and you succeeded marvelously.

My vote.

I don't know what it is about you, Glen, but you make me want to make notes all the time.

So, here's a lovely little short. It's the sort of tale that is exactly right in it's length and delivery of.

I saw Meli mentioned the font. You really got us on that one didn't ya? i was thinking: why why why? And then of course I realised the reason you did it.

I am wondering if it's allowed to be honest and/or wise to do it that way. i mean if you offered this to someone like Sue Moorcroft at Writers Forum, she probably wouldn't read past page two, so disturbed she'd be about the use of the incorrect font.

So, back to my notes..

1. 'Find remembrances of the hours we...' I don't understand that sentence. What do you mean?

2. 'Soaking up every word as if my life depended on it'. That's not a proper sentence.

3. 'Liquid-blue eyes' Do you mean blue liquid? Liquid-blue! Um, I can't make sense of it.

4. You started a new paragraph with 'Or when she...' That's a no no.

5. Last paragraph on page 9, you wrote 'together' 3 times.

6. 'Oft times'. What does that mean?

7. Try and avoid cliches. You wrote 'apple of my eye' and 'green eyed monster' in the same passage.

8. I don't see why you left such a big gap between the end of the diary and the finale. Again, as i mentioned in your other book, just double line space.

9. You wrote '...chest of the gentleman's chest'. Don't use repeated words in a sentence.

10. I haven't got a number 10.

I saw your video earlier about this book and i loved the spirit you demonstrated in that. But even without the video I would still have voted for this story. i really liked it.

Well done and good luck
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Wendy.

What a very touching story. I liked the ending too. You have my vote. :)

Great story I must say! First of all I appreciate the journal handwritten like font. It was a great presentation that at first I thought would not work, but alas I was wrong and I'm glad I was. It was very well written, beautiful in fact. The characters did not even need the dialogue for you did an amazing job telling the story of first love. It even took me back to my first love, it was quite sweet. Not all writers can take you back in time to your own memories.

The ending was something I did not expect, but it was so good! You did an amazing job and definitely deserve the vote.

P.S the Promo vid was a nice touch as well ;)

Blessings,
Meli

I gave this story a well earned vote.
Chris

This was beautiful, and the ending absolutely melted my heart. You definitely earned my vote!

vote..p;]

Well young man, since I encouraged you to enter this, and since I promised I would vote....I just did!! Good luck to you.

All your kind words are greatly appreciated. It is encouragement like this that prompts us to do what we do.

My coffee tasted so much sweeter, for reading your story.
Thank you,
Chris