I found this a very sad and moving write,full of unsaid, unknown feelings that are cleverly kept hidden,would have prefered smaller writing font just a minor point though.
Yours is a different voice that wants to speak out and is imbedded in your writing, very nicely done Cheyenne.
I would like to say thanks again for all your kind words! Each comment that you guys write (whether good or bad) makes me push forward and try to do even better than my best. I hope you people know I truley love you and your beautiful thoughts.
~Cheyenne X)
hey chicka this is spectacular its different but different is good.
Good job! I love the angst behind it, the feelings of helplessness... you did an excellent job of conveying emotion in this peice!
This poem really interesting, Nothing like i've read before. To be a first one is great. You are good at writing and writing is your thing. You make the readers want more and this time i can only say YOU ARE THE BEST! I LOVE IT :)
I liked very much! :) There aren't a lot of free verse poems that I enjoy reading, so take that as a high compliment. :D Very interesting, and cleverly written. I'm not a poet, or not a good one, so I can't give you any tips or constructive criticism, but I can say that I loved it, and will definitely be looking for more. :D Take care, *~Jess~*
but I am not a very good reference for what qualifies as a poem...
I felt it lacked a flow for a poem...maybe it was the way the sentences were structured?
but the words, the sentiment, the angst was beautifully haunting. Your word chioces were great!
keep it up
That was great :) i pictured it in my head and felt it. I absolutely loved this
That was great :) i pictured it in my head and felt it. I absolutely loved this