This is a "teaser"...2,500 words of the target 10,000 :) Some "thing" is in there though, right? Wonder what it is? I can tell you this...it is controversial.
Thanks so much, Terrex, dear Paula, and dear Val, for reading! You may rip the first draft to pieces if you like in this comment box, or privately. It does require help:)

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Stories from our childhood often stay in our memories forever. One that was told to me, as a six year old, was "The Pilgrims' Progress" by John Bunyan. Your tale of a journey through purgatory reminds me of that book. Forging through strange lands, meeting unknown or invisible enemies, seeing wondrous sights...your words take me back to my childhood and the wonder of that saga.

You have captured my interest and I am desperate to know what T & T will find on their journey - what and who they will meet along the way and how they will escape...or, indeed, if they will.

Your imagination is so fertile, Patrick, that I am in awe. You are a gifted writer and I am proud to be your friend. Thank you for another little gem.

I am thrilled you are writing more but this is a tease! Okay, a twenty-four page tease but a tease none the less - puleeze, write more....please..p;}