I may not understand all of it, however, the idea is carried very well. I wonder if the ghostly characters migrated from one person to the other as a parallel to aging. People tend to think of themselves as younger than they are, start seeing faces from the past, ect. I had this experience caring from my ailing grandmother.

The story has a well timed pace. Everything feels believable. I wish you the best of luck. :-)

Thanks, Bek. I always appreciate your eyes and input. I am extremely pleased that you caught my story line. You see, Judy was Mrs. Harris' neighbor and when the mishaps began with the elderly woman, Judy was intrigued beyond measure and since I love the oddity of a situation, my mind went exploring as to the why and how and what, surrounding this most curious neighbor. So, yes, this is another side of the same coin, so to speak. GOOD CATCH! Wa do, Elizabeth

Hi Elizabeth,

Reading your story now. Love the characterisation. I like your imagery. You have a quick pace and a tight setup.

Breathing became a dueling match - very clever and original.

Minor punctuation errors i.e.: commas between adjectives where both modify the noun.

Ooo, this is a carry on from 'The Winter of the Mind'? (I hope I got the title right). What a lovely surprise! From the neighbour's perspective. One of Maeve Binchy's tricks and I love it.

Pg 12: Not sure why you phrased this sentence ...Judy's own thoughts drifted... The use of 'own' makes me think somebody else's thoughts were used a moment ago.

Pg 13: Last line 'through' should be 'though' - a common mistake for me, too, as I touch type.

I felt a little confused about the thing with the neighbour, was it a dream?

Anyway, I loved the story and will give you my vote.

Bek :)

Thanks ever so much, Tina. I appreciate your time, comments and vote. When I write, I mostly never give a thought to who the reader might be...or what the reader may think...I am usually so caught up in the mind story. And when the piece is finished, and someone with a passion for the written word sends me a positive comment, I fall in love with the work all over again. Thanks for giving me such a moment...Elizabeth

In reality, we can indeed learn from the unexpected. You've got my vote! :-D

I really appreciate your time and support. Thank you very much. I look forward to reading more of your work. Again, Wa do, Elizabeth

I enjoyed it! I like the twisted edge you gave to it. Very creative. Keep them coming. I gave you a vote. Good luck! :)

Books that help us to reevaluate life and the world around us never fail to delight me. Thanks. I hope you could recommend to me some more books that touch the subject.

Thanks for your time and comments. This piece came about because of a neighbor's excessive interest in what was happening to her older next door neighbor. I let my mind drift on uncharted ground trying to decipher why the lady held such an intense interest, wanting all the details given over and over, while her eyes grew bright and wild-looking. This tweaked my imaginative juices to no end. I wrote this story quickly, crouched in a corner of this lady's mind, and feeling her excitement over the possibility of sharing the older woman's hallucinations...it was quite the ride! Thanks again, Elizabeth

about life after death, or damn near it. I love your style, your characters come to life every time.