I get to live with a household full of characters only my husband can see...this is my second time around and found it as good as the first!...Paula

Beautifully written. You are really turning out quality writing. Thank You!! I fell into the character immediately and loved her. Not pity. And some admiration for her spunk. The compassion for her was palpable. We all need to think about this for it may be us one day all too soon. Great, great writing on a much needed subject!

You have beautiful descriptions. My one critique would be for you to make it more clear who is talking. I sometimes got confused when you went in to dialogue. I wasn't sure who it was talking.
You did a great job portraying the main character with dementia and it was sad.
Good job and good luck!

Thanks Simone for reading the story and for your comment. I would never like to think I'd left a reader thinking I've added words for the sake of filling the pages, or adding descriptions for the same reasons. As for the word describing the table, Formica, this word was put in to date her, so show that she was still living more or less in the past when Formica tables were the norm. Her world had not changed in decades, and to her, that was just fine. When I write, I read aloud what I've written many times over, and I strive for everything to have a purpose for being on the page. Thank you, again, for your time in reading and responding. Elizabeth

Gorgeously written. I voted.

Oh my, Elizabeth. A quick, fatal heart attack would be more merciful. Good insights.

Thank you for reading my work, and for your time in commenting. My character is dealing with dementia, hallucinations (from meds) and a touch of the first stages of Alzheimer. The Family is indeed a part of her imagination; and as I wrote that she had called the police before, and Cokes were opened, but still full...no one was there to drink them. After so many of this type of calls, the police department will call family and demand that they step in, and either put her in a care facility, or have someone move in with her. They will follow it up to see that all is resolved. Thanks again, for your interest, and support. Elizabeth

Thanks Paige, for your read, comment and vote. I value all reads, all comments, each inspires me to keep my standards raised high, to write the best piece I can, and to always remember I am a progress in the making...Elizabeth

Hi Elizabeth,

I enjoyed your story, it's always a good hook I think starting with a dream sequence like you did. This story you've used a lot of imagery. I felt every movement of your protagonist. I also like some of your original and innovative descriptions.

This was a fascinating story. I'm trying to figure out what happened in it. Was she at this family's house or were they all in her imagination and she'd been taken away because she was nuts.

The story was slow at the beginning and then sped right up at the end, which I'm sure is exactly what you wanted to happen.

Great work, and I'm sure there was no spelling errors.

Bek :)

This is a sad but a beautiful story. You got my vote! :-D