I really like this story, it flows very well. You're a very talented young person.
~Nina~

This is really good. I hope there's more.

when will there be more

Please don't stop here !!! I's love to 'srr' more of your work ! : )

You're kidding me! You write far better than an average 13-year old. I am totally bowled. Everything was perfect about the story. And yes, PLEASE continue this one. This is going to be a Grand Hit. Your imagination will be highly tested hereafter. I have just a single piece of advice for you : MAKE IT UNIQUE. There are many stories like this wherein the duo're supposed to make it in the end. Maybe you'll do the same. But try to keep them guessing till the end, Thats the art.

Please let me know when you update through PM or post in the "Teen Writing and Writers" Group.

Cheers to Sam,
Prakash

Your writing ability is far beyond that of the average 13-year-old. You have a natural flair for telling a good story, excellent grammar skills, and with one or two typos fixed, it'll be absolutely perfect. I love the story, and hope you write more! Please let me know when you post the next section or chapter. Great job! :D

i thought he was going to say something else. like be mad a t her, for example.

Lucy needs to get hit! Great job! (As always.)

please write more! I totally want to know what happens next.!

it's nearly like my life, except for me i don't have a cute guy running after me as well. I give my best friend advice on how to help his girlfriend. I love him and his relationship is going strong. Sometimes i want to be the bitch and ignore his texts and emails. But you don't in the end its what best friends are for. I hope you keep writing even i was on edge to see whats going to happen next PLEASE write more :)x