Absolutely beautiful Got my vote

I greatly appreciate all the comments and help

Thank you so much

Gently touching our hearts with your beautiful words...Thanks for sharing, Manjit

Nice

From a beautiful soul. Just what you would need to feel free.

A lovely poem, written from the heart.

I would like to add, when writing poetry, we can "ad-lib" the words so that they fit better.

Go through your poem and read it aloud and ask yourself- "How can I get it to flow better?"

There are some lines where one word could take the place of others.

I could tell you, but I imagine you would prefer to do that yourself, after all, it is your baby, you gave life to it.

I hope this helps and I look forward to reading more of your work.

Cauldar.

Noted and fixed. I appreciate the help.

Thank you so much. And thanks for the friendship.

I liked your poem. However, I would suggest you fix one thing. It is "yours" not "your's." Otherwise, very commendable.