You need to use quotation marks every time there is real dialogue going on to separate it from the narrative. It will give your tale more punch if you do given your story moves back and forth between the past and what is going on in real time. Keep those transition moments intact to give the story more impact on the immediacy of events happening to your narrator.

David, I truly enjoyed reading this story my friend. I love how you mixed the story up with the poem. Well done. :o) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.

*S* Cynthia

Thank you for participating in our short story writing contest "Rain Stories".

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