And then....?

And then....?

And then....?

And then....?

cant believe its not finished!! :(

i like it

i think this story is good because theres emotions good and bad

thanks for your support the third is almost done

nice. The cover shows the dark side - the inside pages show the light. You have a couple of things that need changing

page 3 you need to capitalize i= I and in = I'm

page 5 to [be] three or four [instead of four or three.] The normal progression will read easier.

page 6 give him was written 2x
too = to
leaving now, needs comma

So little correction and I love the hook at the end. Am looking forward to reading your next book. have saved and given you a vote

im writing the next one "knockout"