And had to say, "nice job".

Actually, I had to say more than that... and you can read it here:

http://www.bookrix.com/_groupforumbook-en--out-of-time-by-ryan-matthew-harker-1.html

Seriously, this is a good one. It has been a long while since I've read a bookrix book that has really intrigued me.

I also admire and respect that you kept swearing down to a minimum, you retained what you meant and you didn't have to be very vulgar about it.

Artistically done, and I applaud you. I would love to know when you update this as I would really like to read more.

Please, keep me posted ;)

I was just wondering if you were going to be adding more to this? very good book.

homework on prehistoric trees - loved the gangster start too...looking for this next part..p

According to most all of time started the same way! I've always loved the concept of time travel. When I was in grade school Back to the Future was my favorite movie, my mom had to stop sending me to the video store by myself 'cause that's all I'd rent, lol! I designed my first time machine about that same era, it was made out of an old vacuum (one of the old lay down cloth cylinder ones) and ran on solar power!

Thank you for your concern over my use of tense. I'm not sure what you mean by past perfect but I'm really trying to tell this story in the first person POV in the present tense, except for the part where he relates the events leading up to his present predicament. I've hoped to succeed at this but have had trouble staying in present tense which is what brought me writing it in this fashion. Sooo, my big question... is it working? I hope so because I have to concentrate to keep my mind in this mode, lol Thank you so much for reading and yes there is definitely more! Glad you enjoy :)

I hope you have more of this, I am higly intrigued, is he dead, was it all a dream?

I suggest you take a good look at what you have written and write it in past perfect.

Your tense slips backwards and forwards from present to past perfect and back again.

If you insist on writing in the present tense at least do it in third person, but then you would have no character POV, just as in present tense first person, which, in my opinion is a silly way to tell about somethig that has happened.

I hope this is of some help as when writing one must remain consistent.

Elisa.

As always your comments are too kind! I've struggled a bit with this one but so far it's been a blast to write. So glad you liked it and I hope you enjoy what comes next! RMH

I just had to read this one, Ryan. If plot is everything, you get an A+. Tight and fast paced. If voice is next, you win again. It's amusing, pithy, just excellent.

That damned square box he lifted...that's got to be the answer:) Honestly, this could almost stand alone, all by itself, as a short story!
Kudos!

What you've written so far has kept me captivated. I don't believe I've read a story quite like this one. My only problem is...you need to finish it! I can't wait to read the rest! Well done!
Liz