haha thanks for sticking up for me but I take it as a advice and improve my work - it makes me a little upset that no one told me before i entered it and now everyone's judging me on it now :? oh well, literally because of one man who inboxed me I managed to get 40/40 (A*) on my English mock exam, thanks for sticking up for me :)

thanks for the feedback I dont take it as a bad comment I take it as advice :) youve been really helpful (I have GCSE's coming up) to be perfectly truthful (im not making up excuses) my elngish is usally better than this, this was quite rushed. When I write on my laptop I find it harder to put my work together so Ill start writing out my work and then putting it on :) Im really happy you made this comment becasue I guess it will help me x

I wrote that message before I saw the "Vote" button, LOL, I feel stupid now. Anyway, I voted for it LOL.

Sorry once again.

With Love and Respect,

Excella Marie Jackson <3

Well I don't know how to add it to competitions, but I did add your book to all of the groups I'm in, and I'm in TONS of groups, so it should bump up your notification! Hope this helps you!

Sorry once again that I don't know how to add it to a competition, I did my best though.

Hope you appreciate it.

With Love and Respect,

Excella Marie Jackson

For valkyrie4241:
I agree with what Valerie said.Regardless of her age, she has to know that a piece entered in a competition will receive both positive and negative feedback. I have received a lot of comments regarding my grammar and I took it and improved my writing.

For Chloe:
I wish you the best of luck in this contest.

oh yea and a good book ^^

really dude REALLY omg the shes 16 give her a break!!

I will be completely honest with you, Chloe. This is not flash fiction. This is an unfinished story. Flash fiction has a beginning, middle and an end, so your abrupt ending is not really an ending...it is just unfinished. I read all the comments about your story and have to be upfront about my reaction. You have way too many grammatical mistakes in this piece. Never end dialogue with a period and then follow it with, He said.... Always put a comma after the dialogue, and then write, "he said."

I am surprised at the number of votes you have received since there are some spectacular flash fiction entries in this contest that are really deserving of votes. So I am off to read them. No hard feelings but sometimes you need to hear the truth in order to improve. I wish you the very best.

Not exactly my genre and there were a few errors along the way, BUT an extremely imaginative tale with strong possibilities of developing into much more. Keep up the good work!

Haha thanks :) I think the ending was so sudden because I spent so much time on the start. I didnt feel like I could fit everything in and I felt it was a bit rushed but as long as people enjoy it I dont mind.