haha my friends told me that i missed some words too but I cant change them unti lthe comepertition is over :)

That was an interesting way to meet a guy. Anyway, there are a few missing words, so you may want to look through the story again. I liked it though, because it was original, and unique. I have voted.

Nice little story. :)
I only was a little bit surprised by the sudden end of your story... Anyway...Pokal verdient. :)
Anja! :)

Thank you for the vote and the comment :)

thank you- Im glad you enjoyed it :)

Chloe,

Adventure. Action. An Edge of your seat story. I like this a lot and would like to read more. You are a talented writer.

Excellent writing! I voted.

I liked it a lot :)
So I voted :)

thanks :) if you think it needs any edits tell me and ill put the ideas in when I have a chance :D I LOVE listening to peoples ideas :)

Thanks :D I'll leave it hanging for a bit but if people want more i'll write more when I have the chance :)

aha thanks :) I loved your book too :) Ill check out the others of yours when I have time :)