You need to un-onhold this!!! I WANT MOARRRR!

ok thannn....

I read the first five chapters...

I've read several high school romances by young writers on BookRix, and let's just say they leave much to be desired. Although that genre is not my cup of tea, yours gives me hope.

Your story is well written and well edited; the characters are nicely developed and the story line moves along nicely. Good work.

A couple of minor things: Pg. 13, waist should be waste, pg. 17, erg should be urge. Also, the formatting needs to be improved to enhance "readability". Make sure that either the paragraphs are indented or, you double space between paragraphs.

Again, nicely written story.

ss "The Camera"

can u PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE write more!?!?!? IM DYING to know what hppens. ur a relly great writer, and i think everyone should read this

please update i am dying to know what happens next :)

From: mordred
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I enjoyed the story even tho' it violates the 20 page rule. Kept my attention all the way. The art theme is well developed and and feeds the story, moving it along.
Only one single criticism and it's a personal hang up - you have some words which you need to correct. Waist and waste are not he same and detract from focus on the story. There are several others, but you get the idea.
Otherwise, an enjoyable read...

My book ttlle is 'Patsy and Skid" hope you get time to read it.

Created: on May 11th 2012 at 07:33:47 PM (EST)

It's really interesting.

So adorable!! You have got to update me as you write!!!

amazing please keep writing

gggg