its really great so far

its really great so far

ooooh! Theres going to be a fight..but with words,something, but a fight any way ^^

It was REALLY good! please write more, amd I really like your new cover, I think it fits her very well :)

I didn't think there could be a story about Guinevere and how she ended up with Arthur
But I'll say this is the only one I will need -///- that was of..um. Anyway, LIKE it! :3

What talent you have! This is a truly wonderful piece. I loved your presentation, also; it really looked like a published book. But I have a few suggestions:

1. I felt that the first few pages were a bit rushed. I think you should spend a little bit longer describing the bond between your character and her mother, so it's well-established in the reader's minds. At the moment, you only have half a page of text before their village is raided and her mother murdered. I think dedicating an entire chapter to your character's childhood wouldn't go amiss. That way when her mother dies, we would have an emotional reaction. But as it is, it feels a bit detached. I'm sure you could easily spend a little longer talking about her youth; the magic she practised with her mother, the way her village looked, smelled, felt. Also, we need to know why her village is stormed by these men. Is her country in the throes of civil war? If so, we need to know.

2. I picked up on a couple of spelling and grammatical errors, but they're nothing more than typos. A quick edit would clear them right up :)

Other than that, this was wonderful. Truly.

thank you, thank you thank you!it's soo good! :)

this is oe of my favorites out of your books! pulease write more!! i love it!

Page 13 it says After everyone left I was Merlin.... I believe the i should be an it. That is all.

You not only have a great imagination, but you follow it up well as a good writer.
Your turn, as you promised lol
Read this and part 2 if you wish.
http://www.bookrix.com/_title-en-lazarus-the-healer-1
Laz