its not good to end a book with the word to be continued i really not like the end

I agree completely. But if I may add to that, the detail should be more toward the murder itself to add the horror into the story. I thought it was comical when reading it.

This book is soooo uninteresting, not scary at all. Certain phrases just don't belong.

hey yall,

No offense, but this story really reiks of bologna on a turkey sub. LOL. The whole, "secret door" thing came from the now famous "Coraline" book/film, and the counting thing, "1..2..3..4..5..6..7.." (the only difference is that she went to the number 6) and then stopping, came from a movie, I believe it is called, "The Excorsism of Emily Rose." If I'm not mistaken. If it wasn't copied from else where, it would be okay, but taking another's work isn't very professional in my opinion. To add, I know this is a short story, but it seems SUPER rushed. I would try to take out the unimportant things, such as putting too much emphesis on the littel girl's feelings towards her neighbors. (A little is okay, I mean that's the main push for the story. But too much can kill it.)

Just trying to critique a little bit. Sorry if I offended anyone at all, this is only meant for insight of what some, (I in particular), may think.

nice when i was reading it i could hear warter fripping from the foset in my kitchen i thought it was agood effect for the story. any ways i loved it you are an awsome writer and i like to see more.

waste of time...... nothing is scary.....

this little seven year old is crazy in wow omg i would beat her but

I like it, it intriuged me and i think you should write more.

wow!

I cant wait for it to be finished.