that was weird lmao but good

u need to improve alittle bit and ya i couldnt see somethings to the words use were a little boring but............okay book

I found it hard to read, the colour of the font against the background made my eyes go a little funny lol.

ok good points, I love the concept of the story but you need to spread it out , add a little detail you seem to rush some parts where us the reader would love to know more.

a very good start will be looking forward to reading more

thank you for sharing

Donna