it was an okay book many many typographical errors and was more like a short story considering it was only 16 pages long

For a young man this book shows great potential and I sincerely hope that he continues writing. I could feel his terror as he wrote the story. How many of us would wish that the tragic flight could have had a happy ending.

the story line was very good, but you need help with your grammer.
lots of it.
but after that, it was very good. very impressive.

and his talented readers, who give him good advice and support...
best regards from Germany

Your story possesses a reality that modern history reflects. It's a believable situation that makes your reader feel tension and the curiosity to keep reaing.

I really enjoyed your story, lots of action and twists. Taking the time to proofread for grammar and spelling will give your reader a much more enjoyable read. However it is great to see such a talented young author. good luck and keep writing. I look forward to reading more of your work.

MAN THAT WAS A ACTION PACKED STORY, I WOULD LOVE TO SEE SOME VISUALS ON THIS STORY. YOU HAVE A BRIGHT FUTURE AHEAD OF YOU, TO BE SO YOUNG AND GIFTED. I AM LOOKING FORWARD TO READING MORE OF YOUR WORK IN THE FUTURE!

...this was one of the first stories I read. I thought I'd give you some time to spiffy it up--following the advice of those people who believe you really have a true talent, and voted for you.
I also believe in you. Your characters (and their dialog) are believable.
This story begins well, and has a good ending. It's action-packed and has a bit of romance. It has villains and heroes and a whole lot of other great elements.
Make your fans proud of you.
It might help if you seek out someone with writing skills, who can sit down with you and go over your story, line by line. Sometimes people are blind to their own errors. I've been fortunate enough to have help with proof-reading for errors, with a lot of things I've written. It makes all the difference in the world.
Good luck!

Interesting story. Although the basic theme is common, that of a takeover of an airplane by terrorists, bad guys, the twist to young people and children as heroes including a kid landing a plane, is great. Also, the reuniting of a father with his sons is a beautiful ending. But, please take to heart the comments on the editing of the piece. You do have story-telling talent, but grammar and spelling mistakes make the story harder to read and enjoy.
Dennis

I read your story and liked it, but it needs some editing. You have a knack for telling a good story.Keep writing!