I teach people your age creative writing, so I can honestly say that you have a good deal of talent and are waaaaay ahead of the curve. My remarks are much the same as everyone else's, nothing that a little proof reading won't cure.

The Horror in this flight was the paragraphing, spelling and phrasing.
You had a good idea but it needs a lot of work. Try proof reading it first. I am sure you will then, be proud of it.
Rate from 1 to 10 is a 6.
My comments are meant to help you, not belate.

Good job, Angel. I agree with most of the comments: Good story line, good feel for action, but the mechanics need work and I know you'll get there. You're very talented. Thank you for the opportunity to read your work.

Carmen

That was really good. A few spelling errors here and there, not bad, I have those too. I was just wondering where the secret airplane cop was. For some reason I can't think of the real name for those people is.

I thought this was a great story with a very interesting backround. The only thing I have to say which some people have also said is the grammer..Just proof read through it. Other than that it was a great read and keep on keepin on ;) !

Your writing skills are good, the book is very well written. Keep up the good work.

Thank you for the feedback and support. I will take the advice and make sure I improve over time in my writings. for those who have just discover my short story "Flight of Horror" please read and enjoy.

-thank you and happy reading
-Vielen Dank und viel Spaß beim Lesen

-Angel Altamirano

Viel Glück! Finde deine Sory sehr spannend und gu geschrieben...
Gruß Tina

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this was a really good story
i hope to see more soon ♥