Will you add more? I never read a book that was justified to the right like that before. It confused me at first but interesting.

i like everything that you have so far! and your cover is making me hungry :)

let me know when you update!

I really like the poem you added about your brother - I like the family theme that is running throughout so far.

Keep it up!

I enjoyed your poem "Stars on David" what a nice tribute to your marine brother. It's so fitting to have stars on a soldier.
Great job!
elizabethsfirst

Another remarkable and well-phrased poem - beautifully written and heartfelt. You certainly have a gift. =D

Your poem was exquisite. In only a few verses, you evoked a wealth of emotion and thought. Beautifully done! As for the story, well, all I can say is I hope you have lots more where that came from - hilarious and well-told! Please add to this! ;D

It seems like you could have an entire book about your family. I am a huge Gabriel Garcia Marquez fan, and your funeral story reminded me of his writing. He always writes such interesting tales from childhood, strange things that happen through the eyes of a child that adults wouldn't understand. He also writes about families and tradition in a way that makes me really wish I could speak Spanish and read his books in their original language.

I think you should write more - I really enjoy your poetry, but I think you could write a really great book!

The River Between Me and You was excellent, with beautiful images and emotion. I particularly liked the Spanish version (though I speak little of the language). Funny (in that nice way), it reminded me of reading Pablo Neruda's collected works...the original Spanish on one page; the English translation on the next.
The funeral and wake. Lol. I was right there with the reminiscence:) Thanks for creating this, Angely.

and the story was funny. it's lovely when our grandparents or parents start to recount their childhood tales.

Only two things, on page 10, when you say: They probably had issues, I would use a comma.

"They probably had issues," my father added.

You have another one on page 12:

". . . old people like to hang out at wakes," my father concluded.

I loved reading your story, well done.

this was really good. I'm honestly not normally a poetry person, but I actually really liked your poem a lot. It was great, good job. ^_^