I liked the visuals set into the story. It reminded me of the days when friends and I would take the train up to China Town on 22nd street in Chicago where I grew up.

The big city life in the North is really a different lifestyle than most people can really understand. Though I've never been to New York, I think it in many ways may be like Chicago.

A well thought out well written story.

A sad tale of the inner city and the sad consequences that can befall the young living there.

An enjoyable read, sad but with a ray of hope at the end.

I enjoyed the changes that you made. It definitely enhanced the story, which I didn't think possible, since I thought you already had something solid. Great job!

Just really excellent, Angely. Yes, I think the transitions work well; better this time around:) The storyline moves smoothly, and once again I am struck by the small incidentals you have incorporated into the narrative, ie., "I click-clacked past a church and crossed myself out of habit."
Anyone who was born and raised in the Catholic tradition knows the significance of that, and it adds authenticity to the narrator's voice, plus gives the scene forward movement through further action. Often it's the small things that add so much to the story.
You'll notice in the next sentence on the same page how you used, "It was past 10 p.m. but a mass...". Now, go back to page one and see how you did it in the opening sentence. "The M train is usually empty at 2:00 am..." See the difference? Were I to write these two lines, I would do it as you did on page 17. I think that the "book" says this is correct. At any rate, a period following "a" and "m".
A few other very small things: As most readers, or many, are unfamiliar with New York and its buroughs, it MIGHT help to spell out which bridge the train was going over? Where is Flatbush? Or was it Bushwick? Over in Brooklyn? New Jersey? Maybe there's a way to inconspicuously tell the reader so we are a bit more oriented.
Redundancies: "As". check out how many times you used the conjunction in the first few pages; see if there is a way to minimize their use? "Underground". You well know that at times we use a particular word for emphasis over and over, however, in this case the use of underground may not have been the best choice. See what others think:) I try not to use a word time and again in a scene, or scenes, unless there is a very good reason. Emphasis.
But these are minor things.
You give just enough information about Boss to clue us in what's happening. And the Getas...:)
This is an excellent slice of life, tragic story of two young kids in the great city. I enjoyed the read again, and felt even more connected. Kudos!
Patrick

It was interesting from the start, and never lost that sense of drama.

I would like to see the story continue. It doesn't look good for Chino, but then again you never know.

I hope he is alright. When my son leaves and doesn't let me know where he is or what he is doing for weeks, I worry too that something might have happened to him.

I wish you luck in the contest.

It is a good piece of work, even though I did not know what some of the ethnic words meant.

I'm a chino myself y me gusta tu libro! Nice work, makes you want to know what happened. You should definitely continue if you; I read quickly so didn't spot any mistakes... Muy bien!

crap, if anyone's going to beat me it's this one. it was amazing, i loved everything about it.

Thank you very much everyone! I'm starting to feel like I have a chance at this Young Writer's contest. And even if I don't, I'm so happy that the story has entertained you all.

Beautifully wriiten. Emotive and raw with just the right amount of drama. Your descriptions are just lovely and I couldn't help feeling that I was back in New York. You did an amazing job and you have such a knack for the narrative. I love how you meshed both cultures, great work!

Blessings

Meli

You've left us with the question will Chino ever be found?

This is a well written mystery, now you have to decide whether to leave us hanging or to write more.Let me know if there is more.