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you cant be a warrior without apprentice training and you cant be a deputy without at least one apprentice

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I'm very much impressed, y43210! I also find it gratifying when someone takes the time to read and then comment on one of my stories/books.
If you are indeed only 8 years-old, you are far ahead of the pack with your writing. I found your three short stories very good. You presented a protagonist with a dilemma, a quest, and then a resolution. Those are the high points in any good work of fiction. I liked your setting very much as well. Your grammar was good on the whole, however, if I may, I'd offer you this advice concerning the book:
Overall, check your tense agreement in each. You begin in present, and then drift into past in the narrative. I would suggest in each staying in present. Something for you to think about.
Look up the definition of the word "Drabble". A drabble is a complete story told in exactly 100 words. No more, no less. Beyond that terrible rule, lol, you must have a beginning, a middle, and an end (roughly speaking). Each story should be able to stand on its own. To connect three separate drabbles is fine, but a reader should be able to take each out and make sense of it without the other two to support it.
I didn't count each story, but it seems the first was well over 100 words; the second a bit short of 100. You can use your Word program (Tools) to count for you:)

Finally, notice in my header that I put your title's first words in caps:)

Okay...I'm going to give you a "B+" for this effort.
"wow! I like this book! I made a comment for you! YAY!"

Keep writing!
Patrick

wow! I like this book! I made a comment for myself! YAY!