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hi , i like the idea of a crystal forest. I can hear the crystals tinkling. When it is misty then it freezes overnight you sometimes get all the trees covered in crystals of frost, very very beautiful . Sadly where i live it rarely freezes because of the sea. But we do have small horses. i counted 9 black Shetland ponies in one field at the weekend. its great to see them in a herd instead of one on its own.
wildgoose

Nice work!!
Keep it up

What is your first language? The name on the book and that of those responding makes me think it isn't English. There are errors throughout in terms of spelling, grammar, and syntax that are easy to fix with a little language help, but I like the story. It's sweet and has all the right elements, which makes this a great start for your first book.

One suggestion I could give is that a book's chapter needs to be much longer than one or two sentences. All of the chapters here are not really enough for even one, but if you put them together, and add a bit to it, you'll have an awesome first chapter!

"My Little Pony" is a fantastic series, and a good choice for fan-fiction. It's upbeat, positive, and enables the imagination to add new story-lines to it, as you did here. Very nicely done. ')

Quite Short and sweet story !!! Nice one with friends !! Good one

I hope that all of you will read it and please leave some comments so I know if to improve my book for the next time