Dear Heart

Can you hear me? Von:
Dear Heart
How can you discover happiness?
If it's there, will you appreciate its presence and make the most out of it before it's too late?
Or will you walk away and just let it go?
Katelyn never wears a smile on her lips since that day her world shattered.
Her only friend is her headphones, her iPod, and her beautiful passion towards music.
The only thing she can do is to tightly close her eyes and earnestly wish, "I hope this time I'll find happiness." with her heart saying those words.
The question is will her wish come true? Will she ever discover the happiness she never had?

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Nicole

already I'm in love with this book and I love how you used Niall as one of the characters are you a Directioner?

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valerieevening

Thank you:) Yes I am a Directioner. I love One Direction a lot so I used them as my characters :)

Nicole

nice

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Kalai

When I read through the story, I could feel the heart wrenching pain that once occupied my heart. Silently suffering, my heart looked for a friend. Searching for a friend, I took to writing. Words became my friend. Only during the time I travel I meet friendly eyes that helped me come out of my loneliness and enjoy life as it is. Thanks for sharing this story. Your story brims with soft emotions that could trickle a tear at once.

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valerieevening

Thank you for your heart touching comment. Reading this comment makes my day. ^_^ It makes me inspired to write more stories in the future.

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HandsOfFate18

This book is quite amazing. I love it. I would suggest checking your word choice and grammar. But aside from that, it's a great story. I hope you write more to it. :)

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valerieevening

^_^ Thank you for your comments and suggestions. :) Can you tell me some of my grammar mistakes so that I could edit or change it?

HandsOfFate18

Well, in many instances, your sentences seem a bit jumbled together or unfinished. You have some words missing from sentences here and there. If I think of any more, I'll let you know. Also, if you'd like someone to edit your story, I'd be more than willing to do so. I've edited... mehr anzeigen

valerieevening

Thank you for your help. Okay, you can edit my story. I'll send you the first chapter :) ^_^

HandsOfFate18

Alright. :)

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Glynis Rankin

Hi. I read your story and it has a wonderful message of hope and love. A strong main character and subject. You talk about her emotions really well.

I was wondering if English was your second language. Because there were several areas that need to be addressed.

If so I would suggest using a free editor. Ginger is a good one to use to help clean up your words so that the story flow smoothly. http://www.gingersoftware.com/

If... mehr anzeigen

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valerieevening

Thank you so much for your comments and a helpful software which I am happily using now. It really improves my grammar and sentence structure.
It is now helping me in the other stories I've written. I would like to ask if you know other helpful free software besides ginger... mehr anzeigen

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Glynis Rankin

I have a few online editors you could use. They have helped me and I hope they will help you as well. Check out the links below. Good luck and let me know when you have one ready to go, I'll give it a read.
http://prowritingaid.com/
http://editminion.com/

EditMinion http://editminion.com/
valerieevening

Thank you for all your help. Sure I'll tell you if I already have another written story.

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theroselily13

omg, Love this. Like I feel like that all the time.. Gahh Write more!

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valerieevening

Dear Theroselily13,

Super sorry for the late reply. I just recently opened my BookRix account a few days ago because I forgot my password. Thank you so much for your comment it inspires me a lot to write more stories. I appreciate it a lot. Thank you again. When you said, you... mehr anzeigen

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