dont worry its not harsh at all im not done with the book. i will work on it thank you for your comment.
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Anya that wan'st Nice omg your supposed to be nicer at least explian to her a little nicer I'm just saying that was harsh. O-O
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okay, i just want to let you know right now that i am pretty thorough when it comes to constructive criticism. I noticed a lot of things. 1.) no qoutes when the characters speak. 2.) virtually no emotion or plot. 3.) i know this is harsh, but i found it rather boring. and its much too short. try going into detail with the movement, the passing of time, the actions. also, try describing the scenery with adjectives. it helps a... mehr anzeigen
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Are you going to write more?! You have to write more!! If you don't write more I'm going to cry, I have to know what happens!! >:P
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