BookRix

Thank you for sharing this piece with me. It's quite different than some of your other work. I'm not really that familiar with what this contest is about, since I'm not entering this contest.

Some of your descriptions capture the essence of the place in time. I know it must mean a great deal to you, because you spent lots of time there. I'm sorry about your animals. I have had many pets pass on over the years. They are like family to me.

On page six, I wasn't sure who they referred to in the fifth paragraph. It might be that I read it too quickly.

I hope you are successful in some of your writing adventures.

Poetic :-)
I love it.
I was there ... in my memories!
All the best,
Katy

Your description took me back to the days when I used to wander through Regents Park, hand in hand with Nicholas, my boyfriend at the time,(also in the mid-60's jonmark222. Amongst other things the details about the grey, furry squirrels and the faddy ducks gave this description authenticity.
Good luck in your competition.
Betty

I liked it...the images..the atmosphere you conveyed.
When I was between 19 and 23 I used to go to Regent's Park to the Open Air theatre. Strawberries and cream; champagne; Shakespeare.
The zoo, the lake.
And my French girlfriend Vivianne. Se lied in Baker Street.
Those were cool times - the swinging sixties in Regent's park. Your story woke up memories.
Thanks,
Jonathan

Picturesque! I hope you win the contest. Well written./joeparente

Hi Timji,

Just reading your newest story. I am wondering why you've chosen not to use quotation marks for dialogue. It confuses me a little. I find I'm not sure if your protagonist is thinking to himself or talking to another. The use of bold & italics also confused me.

You've used nice small paragraphs and your your prose show your talent.

This didn't seem a story so much as a written descriptive of a visit to regents park. I say that because there didn't seem to be a plot. No inciting incident that put your protagonist into a conflict, you get the picture. Was that your intention?

Good luck with your contest.

Bek

A very good vignette. I, personally, enjoy reading works of this venue, they are quick flicks of a moment in time. You've got the gift of observance, and make well use of it in this piece. Thanks for sharing. Elizabeth