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The length of the chapter is fine. The problem is, all the suggestions I and others gave you, are never applied to your stories.
So, all I will say is this:
You have a story of a man living a harsh life and a hero who I think we will see in the coming chapters.
But the writing is as usual, in need of lots of work.
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