BookRix

Yours is one of the few entries that made me smile. You have a wonderful flow in your work and it is easy to ready. I truly enjoyed the story...especially the ending...and wish you all the best in the competition.

Very nicely done!

Best to you in the contest!

Robin

Wow! Ok, you must know me! It's like a page from my real life...or reel life. Have we met?

I loved it!

You do need to use a different font. This one runs words together, actually. I had the same with my entry.

Thanks everyone for the encouraging comments, particularly for my first BoW.

Sorry about any spelling defects - I try to be very carefull about those. The only one I found was unfortunately also a real word so the spell checker didn't catch it.

Hi! to another Aussie!
S*

Hi Susan,

Isn't this every girls dream? Loved their dialogue. Great imagery too, enjoyed your descriptions. It's lyrical, very poetic.

I really enjoyed your story. What a great read.

There are a few spelling errors.

Good luck,

Bek :)

was steamy, Susan! I can recall a hundred "in the moments" with my idols!
Loved it!

Good luck, Susan! Petra :))

Interesting, very warm evocative emotional descriptions. It's a neat alternate life flashing before your eyes story, and the revelation of it being fictitious wish fulfillment makes it perfect. Good ending line too.

Whoosh..the transition caught me by surprise but it was great!...Paula