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READ ON OR DIE TONIGHT AT 10:35 P.M 9 years ago a person named Jerry got dared to sleep in a house that was believed haunted. The next day his friends waited for him outside the house...... They had to go inside and search for him. They went through every room exept the attic. He wasn't supposed to sleep there. He was supposed to sleep in the living room they went to the attic
. They saw Jerry's corpse and they just left because they were scared. But that night they all died because of their friend. He killed them for making him sleep in that house if you don't send this to 11 comments you will die tonight by Jerry. Example 1: A man named Stewart read this and didn't believe it. He shut off his computer and went through his day. That night while he was in bed he heard something outside of his door. He got up to look. And now he's dead. Example 2: a girl named Haley read this in the morning and she got scared but she didn't send it. She wanted to now if it was true. She went to school (She was only 13 years old) and that night she died. If you don't post this on 11 comments Jerry will 'visit' you his isn't fake. Apperently if you copy and past this to ten comments in the next ten minuets you will have the best day of your life tomorrow. You will either get kissed or asked out, if you brake this chain you will see a little dead girl in your room tonight. In the next 53 minuets someone will say I love you or I'm sorry

cute! like a little love story!

you should write more it was really good

Your book is really good. You have a good story line going that grabs the readers attention. Now im going to offer some constructive criticism and hope I dont hurt your feelings. Try using words other than ok. I know its a common word and we all use it a lot, but you dont want to repeat yourself to much when writing. Also after your characters say something you tend to put I said after. For example "Your beautiful" I said. No need to put the I said's in there. Thats why you and I and everyone use quotation marks. It lets the reader know that someone is speaking. Spelling is another big one. Some people will close your book without reading it cause of that one reason. Ok im done correcting you. Like I said im not trying to be mean or hurt your feelings. Just trying to help. I love what your writing. You havea strong main character who is different. Your not afraid to show that. You describe things very well. I could see you characters swimming in the water and kissing. Keep up the good work and dont give up. You have a good imagination.

it's good, just make it longer.

make the story a little longer it a little to sudden that they feel in love so quickly it should have been like they fell in love with each other over a few weeks

fix some of the wordings

Please finish it i would love to read the rest!!

this NEEDS to be finished!!!! :)