when you see a full moon

book 1:OUR FIRST MEETING Von:
when you see a full moon
"tell me, do you like me?"he said
"...yes" i admitted
"i sorta like you too"he said"i'm not to fond of love. As a matter of fact i've never felt this way about any one before."
"N-none has ever said that about me before" i said blushing


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GummyBearMonster

READ ON OR DIE TONIGHT AT 10:35 P.M 9 years ago a person named Jerry got dared to sleep in a house that was believed haunted. The next day his friends waited for him outside the house...... They had to go inside and search for him. They went through every room exept the attic. He wasn't supposed to sleep there. He was supposed to sleep in the living room they went to the attic
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hergirl77

Your book is really good. You have a good story line going that grabs the readers attention. Now im going to offer some constructive criticism and hope I dont hurt your feelings. Try using words other than ok. I know its a common word and we all use it a lot, but you dont want to repeat yourself to much when writing. Also after your characters say something you tend to put I said after. For example "Your beautiful" I said. No... mehr anzeigen

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vamp.wulf.princess

make the story a little longer it a little to sudden that they feel in love so quickly it should have been like they fell in love with each other over a few weeks

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