Just A Little Rain

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Just A Little Rain

As Megan finishes a long day of work, she waits with 6 others for a bus bound to never arrive. As the plot thickens, the characters are forced on to an emotional rollercoaster and experience the flood of the century. 


Stichwörter: 
Rain, Bus Stop, Suprise
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judycolella

This story has a great premise, and the twist at the end is both subtle and well done.

That said, I have to hope you'll go back and edit this, because it's worth the effort. You have lots of spelling, grammar, and formatting mistakes, and a few logic inconsistencies (for instance, if it's night time and extra dark because of the incoming storm, why was the man wearing sunglasses? And if the slide in the park across the street... mehr anzeigen

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bluemermaid66

Thank you!! These errors do make sense and are explained just in my head, i had them all thought out and forgot to add them in after publishing. Thank you for your feed back! I will tell you when it's corrected.
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