Love of My Life

Von:
Love of My Life

He was my first love the love of my life. He made me want to say papi he had me moaning out his name even in my dreams. Not only was the sex incredible but everything else  like his protectiveness, and loving, and even his anger made me want him more and more. 

*Updated regularly* *Can't promise how soon updates will come but I'll try weekly.*


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Gelöschter User

Are you gonna end it there? It's good, it's a slice. Wish there was more.

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Mrs.Torrez

XD ON THE WAY

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Gelöschter User

I can only read 4 pages but seems interesting.

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Mrs.Torrez

Oops sorry trying to fix that glitch

Mrs.Torrez

Now see if you can read it

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Gelöschter User

Not bad honestly but seeing you write that story which just write the real you ( the nessa i know), lol makes it very interesting. Keep it up. The book is great for so far

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Mrs.Torrez

Thanks so much xD

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J. M. Rivers

I read it. This could be a great story you just need to put in the work effort and love. :)

Hmmm, I agree with Judy about dividing the work into paragraphs. You need to develop the character of Antonio because:

1. Who bumps into a stranger and gets so comfortable with them? That's a classic horror movie or is it just me? Or maybe you did that on purpose?

2. He claims that Vanessa is different yet they only just met. *insert... mehr anzeigen

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J. M. Rivers

Oh yeah. I do have a concern, it all seems to be moving so fast. For sb who doesn't trust pple, she seems to be doing the opposite....maybe that's just me. :)

Mrs.Torrez

Then i did a great job somehow she feels safe with him

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